The Times, April 14, 2017
Lovely picture, but the caption is short on detail. This one is much better:
i newspaper, April 14, 2017
This includes the interesting facts that the floor dates from 1850 and that it is normally protected by a wooden floor (I don’t know why it says ‘flooring’). The Times caption is limited by being only two lines, but there is no law of the universe which says a Times caption cannot be three lines. The style should not take precedence over the words.
Incidentally the woman in the picture is named Ann Lawton in the Times and Ann Lawler in the i, so one of them is wrong (or possibly both).
i newspaper, April 13, 2017
This is a horrible word that seems to exist only in newspapers. Wouldn’t ‘a series’ be better?
i newspaper, April 12, 2017
So who is this towering individual? I read through the whole piece but he is not named. (I give the rest below.) Turning to the internet version, I find Herbert Chapman is mentioned as a footnote, but even then his achievements are not spelled out (he led the club to its first FA Cup success and two First Division titles between the wars).
This is poor, and from an editor it is very poor. If you mention someone in this way, you must name him, and say why he is great, and not leave the reader wondering. In this very long piece there was plenty of room. The reader should certainly not have to look it up.
i newspaper, April 12, 2017
- Pooch is a silly old-fashioned word which belongs with toff and boffin – in the 1950s.
- ‘go for float’? A cursory read would have picked up that a word is missing.
- It is Windermere (mere meaning lake), not Lake Windermere. See Post #59 and Places in Style Matters.
Daily Express, April 10, 2017
Here the word ‘slower’ is used wrongly and correctly in the same story.
Slower is an adjective, for example ‘the race was run in a slower time’. However in the first instance it is wrongly used as an adverb to modify the verb ‘shrink’. The words that are needed here are the adverb and comparative ‘more slowly’. It is used correctly in the second instance, as an adjective to modify the noun phrase ‘brain cell loss’.
i newspaper, April 11, 2017
A ‘clime’ is a region defined by its climate. It is often used in the plural, for example ‘He departed for the sunnier climes of the Mediterranean’. So it cannot be used as a synonym for weather or temperature.
A jail housing some of Britain’s most evil killers has been offering them the chance of chemical castration in an effort to thwart their despicable urges.
Frankland jail in Durham has instituted a new scheme which allows some of Britain’s most depraved inmates to undergo a form of chemical castration to sate their desires.
Mail Online, April 9, 2017
To ‘sate’ means to satisfy a desire or an appetite to the full – the opposite of what is meant here. The appropriate word could be ‘suppress’, ‘subdue’, ‘curb’ or ‘extinguish’.
The word ‘jail’ and the phrases ‘some of Britain’s most’ and ‘chemical castration’ appear in both paragraphs. Almost the only difference between the paragraphs is the addition of the name of the prison in the second.
If a scheme is ‘instituted’ it is by definition new.
I would avoid words such as ‘depraved’ and ‘despicable’. They sound hysterical. I would replace ‘evil’ with ‘notorious’ for the same reason.
Sunday Times, April 9, 2017 – Page 1
Here we have an oddly phrased quote, which is taken from a longer piece on Page 7.
Sunday Times, April 9, 2017 – Page 7
Turning to Page 7, we find that the word ‘kill’ has been missed out on Page 1. Now it makes sense! It really should be possible for the average person to copy and paste a quote without losing vital words.
His coffin will be taken to the Chapel of St Mary Undercroft in the Palace of Westminster where he will lay at rest for 24 hours.
BBC News online, April 9, 2017
Shocking ignorance from the BBC. The verb is ‘lie’, not ‘lay’, and the expression is ‘lie in rest’, not ‘at’.
This was corrected after some hours. However much later in the day this heading appeared in Mail Online:
Hero PC is flanked by police guard of honour as his body is brought to lay in the Palace of Westminster
This was not corrected by the next day.
For a full explanation of lie and lay, see Grammar in Style Matters.
Daily Express, April 6, 2017
I must have seen this lazy intro, or its cousin ‘A political row erupted last night’, a million times. Apart from anything else, it’s not true. It is one rent-a-quote MP. You really have to think of an alternative.
This is the intro I would put on it:
THE amount of taxpayers’ cash given away in foreign aid soared by more than £1.2billion last year – a massive ten per cent.
Last night Tory MP Philip Davies said: etc.
Then take in the figures and the Government quote.