All the following cuttings are from the i newspaper, October 14, 2017
There may be a few i readers who do not watch Doctor Foster, so it is necessary to tell them that the woman in the picture is Suranne Jones, who plays the title role. You can’t leave them to guess.
This heading reads as if the judge is talking to his own daughter. A better version would be
Your mother loved you, judge tells girl, 12
Reporters are quite capable of spelling a word two different ways within two paragraphs, but a sub should spot this. For the record, I researched the correct use of gases/gasses for Style Matters. There is a lot of conflicting advice, but I settled on ‘gases’ as a plural of the noun ‘gas’ (the word needed here) and ‘gasses’ as the present tense of the verb ‘to gas’. I would use ‘tenth’ rather than ’10th’, in keeping with using words for numbers one to ten, and figures thereafter.
Careless and ignorant. ‘It’s’ is a short form of ‘it is’, while the possessive of ‘it’ is ‘its’.
‘Shared by’?! How about ‘from’? Or ‘In a statement, Hackney Empire said’ or, best of all, ‘Hackney Empire said’? Anything but ‘shared by’.
So why is it an issue about non-Asian singers? Because the play is set in an Asian restaurant and follows the story of a Chinese kitchen worker. It would be helpful for the reader to be told this.
Many Americanisms enrich the language, but the ghastly ‘snuck’ is not one of them. We would say ‘sneaked’, or I would have used ‘scraped’.
As for the panel (20 words), ‘The Orkney Islands are made up of 70 islands’ is very poor, not to mention the repetition of ‘inhabited’. This is how I would do it:
Orkney comprises 70 islands, 20 of them inhabited. They were first occupied by Mesolithic tribes at least 8,500 years ago. (20 words)
So did they tame the wind? No, they did more tests and concluded it was safe after all.
The heading is pretty bad. Flights are not ‘received’, and there should be some indication that it is the first. I would suggest
Maiden flight for
St Helena airport