#409

i newspaper, May 21, 2018

As I remarked a few days ago (#407) it is clumsy to mix present tense with an event in the past, and it is not necessary. There is no law that captions must be in present tense, and this would read better simply by changing ‘provides’ to ‘provided’.

In 33 words you should avoid repetition, in this case ‘expected’. You could replace the first one with ‘forecast’.

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