#81

Daily Express, April 21, 2017

A total like this is meaningless. In this case we are not given the tools to do the mental arithmetic to obtain an average length of sentence (which would convey something) until the ninth paragraph, and even then it is not a simple sum.  This is how I would do it:

A gang who grabbed more than half a million pounds by blowing up cash machines have been jailed for up to 19 years each.

You don’t need to say ‘A judge has jailed . . .’ because that is the only way anyone is sent to prison. I wouldn’t put ‘in outrageous raids’ – to me, the intro speaks for itself.

 

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