#41

Daily Telegraph, March 22, 2017

Surely it goes without saying that the parents were dead? Let’s hope so. Every word in a story should be considered to decide whether it is necessary.

I think a better heading would be ‘Cliff fall twins . . .’ It is a better shape and somehow a little more tasteful.

Incidentally it is usual practice to give the name of the court where an inquest or any other case is held. (It was Maidstone.) The story should also say where the victims came from. (The Burgess twins came from Elton, Cheshire, and Mr Enion from Radcliffe, Greater Manchester.)

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